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The Coming Storm Part 1: Origins

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Heroes are made, not born. Villains however are sometimes both.

Young Brunia grew up in a modestly fortunate life of a royal on the Voided World of Turandus Darr. For centuries her family were known to uphold order on the planet, as well as be in close relation to The Void itself. All throughout Brunia’s family presence were people in close to the royal family, as well as its array of advisors and security personnel. For these reasons Brunia grew up in somewhat a sheltered lifestyle as many noble children often do.  

Brunia was a modestly pretty girl. Her long and yet maintained blonde hair was very cute in the eyes of her mother and father. Her young and yet petite body was adorned with royal clothing in the colors of her kingdom, these were in fact black and purple, colors often attributed to the Void. She was taught at a very young age to maintain a sense of royal posture and disposition amongst her family’s subjects. She would often be seen holding her chin high and maintaining a calm and emotionless expression upon her face. However one emotion was often known to be unmistakably seen upon the child’s face, anger and frustration.

“Why are mommy and daddy always too busy for me? I’m their princess, not these people.’ Brunia said as she would get upset sometimes.

She was often dragged into social situations with people she knew nothing about. Her family’s council would often be holding important meetings with her mother and father, often inhibiting the amount of time spent with their daughter. Even though she did realize the importance of her family’s duty to her people, Brunia couldn’t help but dislike the noise she would hear when her family’s subjects would come to meet her and how she felt like she was left out of the conversations only to stand around and look pretty.

“I wish all these people would leave my parents and me alone.”

As a child she would often try to find ways to be by herself, either by hiding, creating decoys in her bed, and what regular children will devise in order to leave themselves unattended to. As with all children of the Voidian race she was genetically infused with the power of the Void, and would be able to harness the power of the most abundant state of matter in the universe, plasma.

While the Vodian society was known to be firm evolutionists, and saw the Void merely as a scientific entity of unimaginable proportions many still felt that had somewhat of a higher spiritual connection to the benevolent energy entity that was linked to their worlds. Brunia was one of these individuals.

She would often try to find time to be alone to speak with the Void, as it were either a second father or godfather to her. She would sneak to the family’s private lake outside their castle and sit under a tree. There she would often practice her plasma manipulation , and train to become better at using and mastering her natural Voidian abilities. She would try constantly at mastering them, but ironically she seemed to be less powerful and less in control in harnessing her natural Voidian abilities compared to a peasant Vodian child.

“Grr! Why can’t I get this right? Everyone else can use their powers easily, but I just can’t get them to work!”

When Brunia was frustrated she would often take a break to stare up into the atmosphere over the lake. She could see all manners of beautiful ion storms exploding with lighting like fireworks in the distance. These were often accompanied by loud booming noises, but unlike most storms Void storms were stationary and could be mapped to where they appeared. While many other species would consider being out in the lighting storm very dangerous, the Voidian race were immune to the plasma of storms, and in fact used them to gather energy to power up their society. Also these were not ordinary storms however, but a link between Turandus Darr and the Void. Brunia saw these storms as a way for the Void to communicate with her. She would often ask into the clouds questions to the Void and would interpret the thunder or lighting as a yes or no response.

Accompanying her beside the tree was her pet Void Hound, Sparks. At her young age as a princess Brunia felt Sparks was her most loyal subject and most trusted friend. Brunia loved Sparks with all her heart even if her family frowned upon having a pet roam around in the royal castle. Yet her parents agreed to have Brunia keep the canine Voidling as it was a gift from a member of the local village near the castle.

Sparks was a very friendly and often energetic Void Hound. He appeared very playful and excited, often he would be seen licking his tongue upon Brunia’s face in order to show his care for her. While her parents often scoffed at him for this Brunia didn’t mind that much and often would chuckle at his affection. Sparks had a nice and well groomed purple fur coat that Brunia herself would attend to in maintaining. Like most Void Hounds his body emitted small discharges of electricity through his fur hairs, even more so when excited. His name would often prove fitting as he would put on a show for his master with his own genetically inherited Void powers.

Brunia could feel the connection to the Void Hound and the Void was strong. Even though she felt a tad saddened her own pet was able to manipulate and control the powers of the Void more proficiently than herself she always was entertained when Sparks would put on amusing and funny shenanigans in order to keep her amused.

“Very good, Sparks” she would often say to complement her pet as she either clapped or chuckled while stroking her beloved companion’s coat.

Brunia was strong enough to conjure up a small fireball she would toss as Sparks like a sort of energy ball constructs. Sparks was able to catch it and sustain it long enough to bring it back to her for a rub behind the ears. Yet Brunia felt she could be capable of doing more with her powers. She could feel deep inside her power was vast and yet untapped.

Eventually her uncle Marsar persuaded her parents to teach young Brunia how to further harness and control her powers. Marsar had experience in using them as one of her father’s most faithful Void Warrior.Marsar was a somewhat average height for a Void Warrior, but very powerful and fierce. He possessed dark hair and was very lean and muscular. He wore the royal armor of his family in the colors of black and purple. He spoke in a stern, yet somewhat calm tone and was known to often carry a serious expression on his face. Yet he loved his niece and saw great potential in her that even she didn’t see within herself.

Brunia’s family would allow time for her to train with her uncle. Brunia chose by the lakeside and Marsar thought the serenity of the location would be suitable for her focus. Often Sparks would accompany them to observe as he laid in the grass.
Note: This is a reboot of Brunia's storyline. Therefore she may appear different in personality than she was.
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megatarget's avatar
This looks to be an interesting start to a complex world.  I'm curious to read more.

But.

This is a massive info dump section that is almost entirely tell and almost no show.  While there will definitely be a need for more telling than usual when introducing a brand-new setting, it can still be off-putting to be hit with such a large mass of info and terminology, especially when it is simply told and not also put into practical action.

If this is going to be a shortish work, that can be forgiven to a degree: you have to maximize story-telling per page.  If this is going to be a long work (novella plus), you should seriously reconsider taking this information and working it into actions and scenes.

Have salient points of information come up during the character's actions and life.  History nuggets and political points can come up in conversation or as the situations arise.  Flashbacks to set up points in the near past can help flesh out the characters as opposed to a 'BLAH this happened' statement.

This isn't meant to be harsh and please don't take it that way.  You have what seem to be some very deep and interesting ideas and I want to seem them expressed in the best way possible. :)